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Nowadays people get married and have kids in their thirties rather than when they are younger.Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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In the modern era, it is a common public opinion that
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people are engaged and start their
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 their thirties, not
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their
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 young age. I vehemently agree with the statement.
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society. Nowadays, the decision to get married
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30's
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 have a myriad of
benefites
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benefits
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individuals, family and
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society as well.
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, they are mature enough to take a decision and they can choose their partner
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 their choice.
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,
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 their 30's, most
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the
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people are
settlled
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settled
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finanical
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financial
 stability.
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result
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 they will get
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 alliance and both can live happily.
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, a report published by '
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The Times
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 of
india'
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India
India's
, in 2018 says that, Those who married in their
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thirties
,
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the
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life
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 rather than a
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 who married
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 their
20's
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. They know how to manage a family better than
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marrying
carrying
 a
person
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in
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a youngage
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youngage
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young age
. As
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parents
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 and as
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patner
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partner
, They are
sucessfull
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successful
 human
beigns
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beings
begins
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 to
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, parenting is a difficult
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importent
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important
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. father and the mother are
responsibile
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responsible
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the kids
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kids
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 bad and good behaviours. Those who are over
30's
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, would have more knowledge and experience than
youngesters
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youngsters
.
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, They can
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 enough time with their
childrens
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children
children's
 because they are already stable in terms of
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 and
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person
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.
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, people who are in
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, still struggling
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 stable their
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, They
don'nt
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don't
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 with family and kids.
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, the relation
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 ends up. To cite an example, a survey conducted by local authorities say that, more divorce happened in the age group of 20-25.
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,
successful
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 family comes from
successfull
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successful
 men or women.
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 on the
person
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's behaviour, the family runs
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. I strongly recommend to
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 generation to settle
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life
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 before marriage. That will give you a happy and enjoyable
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • emotional maturity
  • secure upbringing
  • career prospects
  • education and career development
  • lifetime earnings
  • job satisfaction
  • health outcomes
  • demographic shift
  • population growth
  • ageing population
  • parental preparedness
  • responsibilities of parenting
  • modern healthcare
  • capable of having healthy pregnancies
  • balancing population growth
  • establish careers
  • save money
  • healthier relationships
  • better parenting
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