Environment pollution is too alarming to be managed by individuals. Real change can be made at the government level. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental
pollution
is a big
problem
of
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almost all countries nowadays, Some
people
said that environmental problems, cannot
be manage
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by some individuals because
the
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they
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said only
government
can definitely change that
problem
. I argue with that statement
,
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because
environmental
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the environmental
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problem
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problems
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should
be manage
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with
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the
government
but
also
in
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the help of
people
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. First of all, I understand that some
people
said that only
government
can solve
environmental
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an environmental
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problem
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problems
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.
For
example
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Singapore
government
prohibited the use of diesel cars and
equipement
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equipment
in some of the very busy
street
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streets
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in
SIngapore
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Singapore
city
,
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because it can cause
to
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much
pollution
and smoke belching coming
form
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from
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diesel cars, the only allowed to enter
during
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the weekend
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weekend
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is the electric cars.
This
is a very good initiative
to
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there
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government
because it can
reaaly
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really
reduce
pollution
.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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should have the power and authority to control and manage environmental
pollution
, but
government
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the government
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cannot do it alone...it should have the help of the
people
.
For example
, recycled
product
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products
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or trash
it
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should be put in
proper
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the proper
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place so that it cannot cause
pollution
, and
people
should segregate the waste materials, like plastic and cans for proper disposal.
In addition
,
people
can help the
government
to solve
pollution
, if
people
did not use
there
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car
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everyday
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. In conclusion,
government
and the
people
should have a proper management plan to control
to
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much environmental
pollution
to our mother earth. it should be
total
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a total
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team effort for the
government
and the
people
to solve environmental
pollution
.
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