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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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These days, more and more
people
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 are starting to think about studying abroad. In the past, more
students
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 finished university in their own country which is a very good option, but now teenagers have a chance and opportunity to study in a
foregin
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foreign
 country.
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 of benefits and drawbacks.
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 , some countries propose
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 study and tuition. They are really open for
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, and a
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 of apartments are offered by citizens for them at affordable prices.
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, many young
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 choose to study abroad because of their dream university.
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 universities have a good reputation which is connected with a lucrative job after graduation.
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,
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 are curious about the world, and they really want to get to know more about other cultures.
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 have a chance to improve their language and meet
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 from different countries. They gain international experience and outlook on the world.
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, there are not only positive aspects of studying abroad. Sometimes it is really hard to find the key to a good experience at a
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foreign
 university is an open mind.
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 have to remember that the cost of living is very high,
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there are a few countries where the standard of living is lower than in Poland. Apart from that, the transport back home is much heavier. It is very often that plane tickets are very expensive, which causes
students
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 cannot visit their family so often. Taking everything into consideration, I personally think that studying abroad gives
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 a
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 of chances, and opens a
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 of doors.
Teengares
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Teenagers
 do not have to focus, only on studying in their own country, but they
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 can consider studying abroad.
People
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 can always visit a little bit of the world and make amazing friendships for life.
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