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Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on television and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 hold different opinions about whether violent
films
 should be controlled.
Although
this
 could be true to some extent, I believe that regulating the level of violence in
films
 is unnecessary. On one hand, it may be a warning that audiences spending too much time on violent plots in
films
 may lead to violent
behaviours
 in reality. It means a child whom exposures to violence may build on his abusive
behaviours
 and get the way for incidence committing a crime.
For example
, learning towards fighting scenes may be attributed to abusive behaviour with their companions in real life without considering the consequences.
Besides
, watching enormous violent actions in
films
 affect how young viewers evaluate violent
behaviours
 and take them for granted.
As a result
, they grow up and lack empathy.
On the other hand
, many
people
 and I believe that regulating
films
 is not essential cause the benefits of
this
 kind of film and the consciousness of viewers. The government tracks and minimizes the action plots and twists leading to the absence and run down of typical plots of
films
. In consequence, audiences feel boredom and chose other kinds of
films
.
In addition
, the majority of
people
 have no difficulty differentiating between fact and fiction, meaning that they are conscious enough to not perform similar acts themselves in real life. viewers simply seek the thrill and excitement from
this
 genre, so if violent content is cut out of products, the appeal to these movies will be reduced. In conclusion, violent content to some extent affects young
behaviours
.
However
, the majority of
people
 are able to distinguish between reality and fiction, and will not bring
such
 scenes into their daily life,
thus
, restricting violent content will make action movies bland.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regulation
  • vulnerable groups
  • age restrictions
  • censorship
  • real-life aggression
  • healthier society
  • creative freedom
  • free speech
  • artistic vision
  • cultural narratives
  • personal responsibility
  • viewing choices
  • balanced approach
  • rating systems
  • parental guidance
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