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IELTS 15 Test4 In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cell phone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, people are growing with the world of high-tech devices. Almost all aspects of life go through digital gadgets
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 as movies, games, sports, eating and even paying.
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of paying for items by cell phone apps and provide a logical conclusion, showing that in my opinion, the benefits of
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 development in the digital world exceed its downside. One evident benefit is
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convenience. Compare with decades ago many options related to
money
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 are available.
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, sending
money
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 by apps, taking credit from phones and so on.
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 just "one-click" you can do almost everything with your
bank
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 account. Another advantage is safety which contributes to
declining
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the declining
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 crime rate in our society. Take Kazakhstan as an example. Since 2012 when we have taken
bank
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 apps for paying for things crime rate in large cities decreased considerably. Turning to the other hand,
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 development can be subjected to
cyber attacks
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. What I mean by saying
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 is that there is a risk to lose
money
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 if someone breaks your gadgets.
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, another day friend of mine had taken a phone call which says that it was from a
bank
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 and his
money
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 was going to be stolen by cyber terrorists
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 gave the code of his credit card.
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, my friend was left with no
money
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 in his
bank
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 account. In conclusion, it is clear to see that paying for things by phone is convenient and contributes to people's safety.
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, in my
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 opinion, both national and global policies for digital
money
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 should be implemented and made mandatory to practice by citizens and the government.
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