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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The first chart shows the
number
 of annual overseas
visitors
 to Australia from 1975 to 2005.
Overall
,
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the Australia
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Australia
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Australian
show examples
 visitor's
number
 increased gradually, which was nearly 10
million
 in 1975 and more than 30
million
 in 2005. In 1995, the total of
visitors
 was less than 25
million
 and it doubled
of
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to
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 1975 numbers. Looking at the second line graph more closely, it shows the total of overseas
visitors
 compared to 1975 and 2005. The overseas
nataions
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nations
notations
 listed are South Korea, Japan, China, the USA, Britain, and Europe. The
number
 of
visitors
also
 inclined significantly, which was 8.8
million
 in 1975 and 30.4
million
 in 2005. In 1975, the total of Europe was 1.1
million
 and it
quadrapled
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quadrupled
of
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in
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 2005 whose
visitors
 were 4.5
million
. Japan was the most
visitors
 in 1975 and 2005. It was 3.2
million
 in 1975 and 12.0
million
 in 2005. There is a slight change in China
that
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apply
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the
number
 of
visitor
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visitors
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 was 0.3
million
 in 1975 and inclined slightly to 0.8
million
 in 2005.
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