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the gap between the rich and the increasing. What proble doese this cause? What solution can you suggest?

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In today's society, many questions cannot be solved with a good solution in every country
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 as the gap between the rich and the increasing. In
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, the rich usually have their own
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 with other businessmen so they can get more cooperation and better cooperative partner for a commerce project that car more money.
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 the increasing,
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, the rich have more experience and strong funds than the increasing so they can deal with various emergencies in the trade business and complete some transactions more steadily. A possible solution to
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. It can help the rich establish a good image and
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, and bring sane able young people into
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 so that they can have better opportunities to develop. The other solution is the country should publish some policies about the help of listed companies to private enterprises, and the ability of private enterprises to get priority opportunities to co-operate with listed companies, and learn from the rich have to face trade emergencies steadily In conclusion, the social problem of getting richer, and richer can not be completely changed It can only balance part of the gap between the rich and the poor by making economic development. of the whole society better and better.

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