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You work for a small company. You need to arrange for some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter • explain why you want to take time off work • give details of how long you will be away • suggest how you will make up for the lost time Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

#work #company #time #employer #lost #addresses #dear……………………
Dear Susan, I hope you are having a good day. I would like to ask for a
favor
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. Since I have worked in
this
 company for five years
,
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and dedicated my profession
in
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 my position as a sale representative. I kindly request a leave of absence for one month
due to
 a health issue.
Last
 week, after an annual check-up, my family doctor found a small cyst in my right breast. She suggested
me
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to
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have
surgeries
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.
This
 cyst is quite big, it may need two surgeries to remove
it
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and rebuild my right breast.
Thus
, probably I need one month to undergo the treatment and recovery. I will appreciate you grant me one month
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leave of absence. I will pass my clients to Jessica and Johnny and provide all relevant info regarding my
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 needs and preferences regarding our company. I
also
 will leave my personal contact info to them in
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in
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any
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 emergency. I would like to leave my position
since
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 March 15, and I will be back
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 April 15. If you have any concerns, please let me know. Best regards, Kathy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Requesting time off
  • Family commitments
  • Health reasons
  • Personal development
  • Duration
  • Compensate
  • Delegating tasks
  • Minimize impact
  • Urgent matters
  • Accommodate
  • Gratitude
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