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You have seen and advertisement from a couple who live in australia for some one to teach their two children your language for a year write a letter t the couple . in your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job . What else you could do for the family and give your reason for wanting the job

#advertisement #couple #australia #two #children #language #year #job #reason
dear ram
This
 letter is in regards to inform you that I am interested in teaching your children English language as I have seen
advertisement
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 about
about
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that you are looking for
tutor
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Firstly
 I have done my
masters
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 in
english
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English
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.
Secondly
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 I have 5 years of teaching experience and these 2 things
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 me a perfect fit for the job .
Moreover
 teaching is my passion and
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 really enjoy doing it . Apart from
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that
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i
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 can provide yoga classes to the kids , as
i
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 am
certified
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 yoga teacher . Physical education is
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 important
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 studies .So during
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time
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 we can practice yoga sessions which will
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keep
 young ones physically and mentally fit . If I get
this
 job , I will be able to gain more experience which will add more value to my resume .
This
 will help me to get more new
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opportunities
oppertunities
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opportunities
 in future I am looking forward
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positive feedback from your side Yours sincerely Amrita
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