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some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while other say that they should think more realistically about their future. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
 argue that one's career should be something in which they are interested,
while
 others believe that young
people
 should think more carefully about their future and consider society's needs. Personally, I think that everyone has the right to decide for themselves and choose their future
job
 based on their talents, not what society needs them to be.
This
 essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, it is evident that
people
 can not perform well in a field which they do not fancy.
Thus
, children should be encouraged to study a subject that they are passionate about.
This
 can be achieved by helping them to find their
favorite
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 subject at school and
support
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 their decisions and interests. Take a doctor who studied medicine because of her parents as an example, she might have been a significant actress if she followed her own dreams. In that
way
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 she would not have to face something that she despises on a daily basis.
Additionally
, it is highly possible for humans to change their minds and change their
job
 later in life and
this
 is
due to
 a lack of interest in the
job
 they are getting paid for.
On the other hand
, we should take poorer countries into consideration.
For instance
, the professionals from that country are likely to migrate to developed countries
due to
 better
job
 and life opportunities, which is quite understandable.
Therefore
, the community will need to train more doctors, scientists and engineers.
This
 is why some
people
 suppose that the community do not need artists and sports stars as much as diagnosticians and researchers. In conclusion, I tend to agree with the first group because
people
 are more inclined to do their
job
 if they have chosen it voluntarily,
however
, I think the governments should think of a solution for poorer nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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