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Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: – Explain how much you have missed your friend – Describe how you feel about your friend’s return – Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

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Dear Toma, I was over the moon after hearing
the
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 decision of your for moving back
to
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here. I cannot describe in words how much I missed you in
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last
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 five years. We used to hang out
in
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every
weekends
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, which I missed terribly during your stay in abroad.
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, I did not go to
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Paris with my colleagues, as I promised to go with you.
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, I am super excited about your news of coming back to Dhaka.
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, I am requesting you to stay
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 my home once you are here. There are
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 benefits for both of us.
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, as you are returning after a long
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 in Dhaka, you must be forgotten most of the commute routes. I can surely help you when you will be here.
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, we can both share the
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 as the price of daily goods is getting higher day by day after the pandemic. Apart from these, after a long
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time
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 we might get the chance to spend some quality
time
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 together once you are here. I am eagerly waiting for your return. Please let me know your flight details so that I can pick you up from the airport on
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. Best Wishes, Mymuna
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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