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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this trend?

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For many years
people
 indulge in reading for various reasons. Recently, the trend of reading through the use of digital platforms has increased rather than using physical copies. Though there are some positive aspects of
this
, I believe that the demerits outweigh the merits. The following paragraphs will clearly convey my view with relevant examples. Ostensibly, the rise in the usage of digital devices
such
 as computers, tablets and smartphones for numerous purposes. One of these is for indulging in literature. Undoubtedly, mobile phones
comes
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 with the convenience of easy-to-carry wherever we go.
As a result
, a person has easy access to the
books
 stored on his mobile phone. To cite an example, most
people
 in metropolitan cities commute through public transportation systems and read
books
 from their smartphones rather than carrying a physical copy of
it
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.
Moreover
, e-
books
 require less amount of maintenance than hardcopy which can be unreadable after keeping them for a longer duration. Unequivocally, from a holistic
viewpoint
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 there are far more downsides to reading from an e-book.
Firstly
, those who are reading from their smartphone may not be able to concentrate on their reading material because of the distractions caused by their phones
such
 as getting a call from someone or a notification on their device.
In contrast
, reading from a hard copy has very few distractions and
also
 the absorption level of information would be higher than reading something digitally. The use of digital devices for a prolonged period of time may cause strain
in
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 the eyes . The increased eye fatigue can create sleep disorders and
people
 who read
books
 online are at an increased risk of
this
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by 'Cosmopolitan' in 2022 states that
people
 who are habituated to reading from their digital devices at night time are getting less amount of quality sleep than others who prefer the physical way of reading. To recapitulate, even though the digital mode of
books
 comes with the convenience of accessibility and maintenance, I believe that the disadvantages
such
 as absorbing information, eye strain and the sleep disorders it causes outstrip its few advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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