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People have different ways of escaping stress and difficult of modern life. Some read, some exercise, others work in their gardens. What do you think are the reasons for stress? What are the best ways of reducing stress?

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Most people think that in advance life there are several ways of escaping from
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read books and some do exercise , a farm in a garden or busy in other places.Of ,course most of the reasons for
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 low our strain
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 some physical strength. In modern times the soul is so busy and all
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the people in the entire world get stressed
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 there being some stages for getting pressure some lose
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their jobs and more who lose love or other things .For ,instance if in the society someone lost cell phone or fights in a house over a financial problem , so there is a deficiency of jobs and they get weight
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stress
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 they include several types of disease in the whole activity they cannot get well treat themself are controlled her self . Reducing pressure
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 more difficult so we need to
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not take the
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 and enjoy life .If we go in tension we need to forget everything which happened to us and we busy own self
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 some type of bodywork to spend our time good in them
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 to read the newspaper reading some books or going outside with some friends is
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fact that we forget all that
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 happened to us . For ,example if suffering one would start some exercise the time he passes in bodybuilding
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 created his mind strong. In my conclusion there are more which do in our life is a big problem .we need to prepare own self for every situation so
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 is not the solution to every problem
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