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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice?

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There is no doubt that these days some
languages
such
 as English, French and mandarin become more popular spoken and
minority
languages
 are almost disappearing. The question is, is good that some nations
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have taken action to protect their own
languages
? In
this
 essay, I am going to explain
this
 practice and draw my own view. In terms of advantages, the county's
language
 defines its identity. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that speaking a unique
language
 helps to keep diversity among people. To illustrate, when tourists come to these countries they will have to try to learn about what is attractive in their cultures and the
language
 is the most attractive thing in the culture.
In other words
, when a country is unique in its cultural identity tourism will be getting increase.
Then
 the finance of their country will rise up.
However
, in
this
 globalization speaking a
minority
language
 is too hard for development.
Firstly
, speaking a
minority
language
 makes a lot of misunderstanding.
In other words
, it's
such
 a weak way to communicate and
also
 gets difficult to access foreign knowledge.
Secondly
, the
minority
language
 has a negative impact
especially
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 in developed nations.
This
 is because, these nations
such
 as China, and the USA many countries have depended on their industrial and financial resources.
Also
, developing need to engage with other countries.
Minority
languages
 should not depend on it to protect their position in the developing world. In conclusion,
although
 the work to protect the nation's
language
 is a crucial responsibility for saving identity, it's
also
 bearing bad effects.
Therefore
, I believe that taking steps to protect
minority
languages
 is having a negative influence in
this
 globalization world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Minority languages
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language revitalization
  • Bilingualism
  • Multilingualism
  • Cultural identity
  • Language preservation
  • Indigenous languages
  • Global diversity
  • Language courses
  • Language death
  • Worldviews
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Inclusive society
  • Economic opportunities
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