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in many countries paying for things using mobile phones (cell phone ) apps is becoming incresingly common . Does this development have more advantages or disavantages ?

#countries #phones #cell #phone #apps #development #disavantages
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now a days
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nowadays
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 using
smart phone
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smartphone
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 for doing payments is becoming very popular .I believe that there are more negative effects
then
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 positive outcomes
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with
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 android
phine
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phone
phones
 have really changed payment method , Various
application
such
 as Bharat pay ,
paypal
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Paypal
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,
apple
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and apple
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 pay has made
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a
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transfer of
money
 very easy .
Firstly
this
 has increased the chances of fraud
and
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apply
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because
until
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unless the person is not aware
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how to use the
application
especially
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 adults anyone can misuse their account
money
 .
Secondly
 , interact transfers have become so easy that we do not realize
while
 spending
money
 and
at
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 the
end
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 it results in
unnecessery
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unnecessary
spendings
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spending
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.In
year
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the year
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2005
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,2005
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 there was
a news
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news
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 from America that
some one
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someone
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someonestole
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someone stole
money
form
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from
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 her account by just using
online
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an online
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application
 and the
women
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woman
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 was not even aware of it.
Furthermore
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 there are some pros of mobile
application
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applications
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this
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apply
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includes
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 that there is no need to visit bank or ATM machines .Cashless
transections
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transactions
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 can be done so there is no concern
of
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about
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 taking care of liquid cash . In a
nutshell
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 online
payment
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payments
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 have made our life a way easier because
everthing
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everything
 can be done
by
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 one click but for elderly and innocent people anyone can do
fraus
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fraud
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 with them .
Thus
 one needs to be careful
while
 using these methods .
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