Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

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the
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modern
society
,
crime
racing
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up day by day. Studies
shows
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many prisoners retake crimes even after they
out
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of Jail. I’m going to discuss the cause and effects relating to
this
matter.
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me,
people
are tend
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to be more aggressive each and every day. Some of them ended up showing their anger by involving
to
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in
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a fight or else by doing a
crime
. Most
of
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the
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people
became
criminals
because
of
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they try to take revenge
from
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on
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the
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others.
For
instance
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there was a famous guy who killed seven
people
as
a
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revenge
of
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his sister’s rape.
Secondly
, drugs and lack of money became very common in
the
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modern
society
.
Young
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generation
are
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more
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to
the
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drugs
now a days
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nowadays
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.
This
cause to gain robbery and
crime
.
This
became a huge impact
to
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association
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the association
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. Showing possible effects
in
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of
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this
major problem
are
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the
society
and government ministry. The government can spend more money by introducing many programs which can prison bring up their level of
economy
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as well as
their skill. The
criminals
will not
be involve
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in
further
crimes.
Nevertheless
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government should build rehabilitation
centers
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for
the
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criminals
,
therefore
they will learn how to deal with
community
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the community
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and how to earn by hardworking.
Finally
,
the
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society
and education
is
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the next effects
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brings
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criminals
to
crime
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a crime
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back.
Society
should treat each and every person as
similarities
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prisons shouldn’t marginalize at any cost. In
conclusion
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the given reasons rise up
people
for being
misdeed
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misdeeds
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and neglect.
Therefor
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by providing proper guldens they can be rescued
for
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from
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being
a murders
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murders
a murder
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once again.
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