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The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
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The line charts show information on five different jam fruits namely, strawberry, raspberry, grape, cherry and plum from 2009 to 2014. A period of five years.
Overall
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, the first thing that can be clearly seen that strawberry was the highest product sold and it was greatly increased over five years.
In contrast
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, the plum was the smallest product sold and it declined every year.
In addition
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, strawberry jam increased from 3 per
cent
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 to 7 per
cent
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 which means went up from 4 per
cent
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 from 2009 to 2014. Followed by raspberry and grape at 4.5 and 5.5 per
cent
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 in 2019.
On the other hand
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, plums went down every year in 2009 the percentage sold at 2.5 per
cent
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 and declined to 2014 at zero per
cent
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 similar to
cherry
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cherries
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 which declined every year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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