It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

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community
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so,some
people
think that it a good chance to make a new life for children,
while
others believe
that is
make a new job for
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.
This
essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand,
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a new
school
in the same place is a bad idea.
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,
that is
different to finding
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new
employee
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employees
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for
this
school
so, that's why some think
that is
not a good idea.
On the other hand
,
built
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a new high
school
is a good opportunity for the community.To illustrate, that makes for
built
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a new high
school
we can open
a new jobs
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for the
local
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locals
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.
Hence
the belief that a good idea for all
people
living in
this
area.
In addition
,
bulit
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built
a new high
school
is
an
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apply
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Amazing and
this
helps
people
to make a new business around the
school
.For an instance, building a restaurant and small shops around the
school
can make a city
a
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good for
living
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.
This
proves clearly that
develop
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to
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modern
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city. In conclusion, after analysis of both
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of view,I believe
that is
good for all
people
living in
this
region and
built
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building
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a new high
school
are
a
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apply
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big
changes
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when we have
people
do
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who do
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not like that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational opportunities
  • extracurricular activities
  • community hub
  • stimulate the local economy
  • property values
  • quality of life
  • resource allocation
  • construction and operation
  • economic benefits
  • community development
  • traffic and congestion
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