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Band 3

It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

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Introduction
These days education is important for developing
community
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a community
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 so,some
people
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 think that it a good chance to make a new life for children,
while
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 others believe
that is
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 make a new job for
community
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the community
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.
Body paragraph 1
This
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 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
Body paragraph 2
On the one hand,
built
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 a new
school
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 in the same place is a bad idea.
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,
that is
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 different to finding
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a
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new
employee
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employees
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 for
this
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school
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 so, that's why some think
that is
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 not a good idea.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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,
built
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building
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 a new high
school
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 is a good opportunity for the community.To illustrate, that makes for
built
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building
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 a new high
school
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 we can open
a new jobs
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new jobs
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 for the
local
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locals
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.
Hence
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 the belief that a good idea for all
people
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 living in
this
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 area.
Body paragraph 4
In addition
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bulit
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built
 a new high
school
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 is
an
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apply
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Amazing and
this
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 helps
people
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 to make a new business around the
school
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.For an instance, building a restaurant and small shops around the
school
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 can make a city
a
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good for
living
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This
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 proves clearly that
develop
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development
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to
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into
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modern
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the modern
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 city.
Conclusion
In conclusion, after analysis of both
point
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 of view,I believe
that is
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 good for all
people
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 living in
this
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 region and
built
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building
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 a new high
school
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 are
a
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apply
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big
changes
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change
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 when we have
people
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do
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who do
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 not like that.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational opportunities
  • extracurricular activities
  • community hub
  • stimulate the local economy
  • property values
  • quality of life
  • resource allocation
  • construction and operation
  • economic benefits
  • community development
  • traffic and congestion
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