It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

I totally agree that a new high
school
may be built in my
hometown
.
This
essay will give the reason why I think positively about having a new high
school
in my area. The first idea that comes to mind is
school
is very important for children in my city.Every
children
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child
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need to have an education and education can change their life.
Second,
some parent sent their kids to study in a city which is very expensive and there pay a lot of money
such
as transportation for sending students to
school
.
In addition
, many students must wake up in the morning and come back home late so,there are very tired.
Moreover
, the new
school
can help businesses in my area
went
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up and
also
, have new caress in my
hometown
.
On the other hand
, someone thinks that new schools can disrupt the experiment of their
hometown
because of the new buildings,but only one thing
to
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too
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negative.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that new schools are very great in my
hometown
because there can bring more benefits for us.
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