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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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What would you like to be when you grow up?
This
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 is a common question that adults ask kids. Some of them suggest that children do the same career as their parents,
whereas
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 some argue that they choose their future by themself. As for the reason that children should have the freedom to select their way , I disagree with the statement. The ideas that support my opinion will be discussed in the essay.
To begin
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 with, there are various reasons why they have to choose jobs that are similar to theirs.
Firstly
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, knowledge and experience in that
job
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, for instance,
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for instance
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 some kids see how that their parent
work
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 or they were taught by them.
Hence
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, they are used to that
job
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.
Secondly
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, some older would like the younger ones to
work
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 in their family business because they do not their kids to
work
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 for other people who are not their family.
Moreover
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, being the owner is better than being the worker.
However
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, happiness is
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 significant, working in a career that they not would like to do made them feel sad
although
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 they might be masters in that field. Not everyone has the same views, some people would like to do
work
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 that might be strange in others' minds.
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, a kid in a doctor's family would like to be a chef. In conclusion, the decision on a
job
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 should only depend on children's favourites, the same or not the same
job
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 as their family there should decide by themselves.
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