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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities. What are the possible causes and solutions ?

#people #neighbours #communities
In the present year, many
people
 are not communicating with others
such
 as their communities. And it is a big
problem
 for many areas now. In my opinion, I think problems come from social change over many years
such
 as the development of technology and others.
This
 essay will give the reason and how to solve a
problem
. The first idea that comes to mind is many
people
 are only focusing on their life
such
 as work and money
therefore
, there do not interested in other
people
for example
, they always come back home late that why there to not have time to talk with their neighbours.
Second,
technology can make the world change someone prefer to meet
people
 from social media and enjoy doing everything online like online shopping or ordering food online so, there never meet
people
 around their house. In ,contrast technology is making life easier but sociability can be changed.
Moreover
,
this
 situation is very increasing in many nations and it is a very big
problem
 for government to solve it. I saw many countries try to stop
this
problem
 by supporting humans in communities to contact each other in their local areas.
To sum up
, I totally believe that many
people
 are very different from the past. Many teenagers very believe in themself and enjoy living alone
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is why there do not want to meet others.They have social only the internet and meet
people
 on the internet not in the real life that it is very dangerous for everyone.
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