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Some people think that Government is wasting of money on the Arts,And this money could be better spend elses where. To what extent do you agree with this view.

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Art
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 is the diverse human activities
involes
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involves
involved
 with creativity and subtle
imginative
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imaginative
imagination
.It is argued by
few
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a few
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 thinkers of the
society
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 that money should not spend on Arts by the administration rather than spending it on other developmental work .From my point of
view
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,view
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 it's not a good idea to
negelect
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neglect
Art
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 which is the eternal expression of internal human potentiality. On the one hand, some people
belive
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believe
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 that there are other areas namely health,education, and technology where
government
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the government
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 can spend the money can
be spend
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be spent
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 wisely. Children are struggling
of
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with
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proper
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a proper
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 diet which
cause
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causes
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malnutritions
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malnutrition
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,
can
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which can
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 be
adress
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addressed
address
 some
extend
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by providing a free
mid day
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mid-day
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standard meal for
the
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them. Third world
country
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countries
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 like India's Health system has been broken down.There is
innsuficient availablity
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insufficient availability
 of advance medical
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and medicines or medical staff ,which can be
fullfill
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fulfilled
fulfil
 by providing Grants.
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,the education system can be updated by maintaining the standard
infrastucture
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infrastructure
,teaching aids and
staffs
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staff
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.
On the other
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hand
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 I
belive
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believe
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that ,
Art
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 is
the
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an
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 integral part,which
show
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shows
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a
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the
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 healthy and advancement of
the
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apply
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society
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.The
cretive
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creative
 thinking of people makes
life
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 more interesting,
eassy
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easy
,and colourful.Think
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of
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something without having
Art
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,music,literature,
cinema
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and cinema
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 how
the
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apply
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society
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look
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looks
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 like.
The
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apply
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Asthetic
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Aesthetic
 and Supra
asthetic
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aesthetic
 science bring meaning
in
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to
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life
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.In every action of
the
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apply
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human activities
involes
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involves
 the science of
Art
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. Even
people
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though people
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 eat, there is
art
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 involved.
Cookinfg
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Cooking
 is
also
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a
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an
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Art
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.The clothes they were there
is
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are
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Art
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.From the
day to
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day-to-day
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day
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,day
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life
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 expression to the subtle aspects like Compose of music,
peom
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poems
,writing literature ,all over the
the
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apply
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presence of
Art
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 is essential. In Conclusion,It can not be
denyed
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denied
 that there is
need
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a need
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of
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for
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developments
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development
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 in many areas of human
life
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,But In my opinion Spending money on
Art
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 , Painting,
literature
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and literature
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 is worthful because without
this
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 there can not
be think
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be thought
be thinking
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 of a healthy and
prosporous
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prosperous
society
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.

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