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The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
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the charts illustrate the purchases of five different kinds of jams from 2009 to 2014. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that strawberry
jam
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 was at the top of the comparison over the years. First of all, in 2009, strawberry
jam
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 started at slightly higher than 3 and continued to increase during the years until reaching 7 by the end of 2014.
On the other hand
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plum
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the plum
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jam
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 had the opposite form of
the
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apply
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strawberry. By far, the beginning was at 2.5 in 2009 but
eventually
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 it dropped gradually till reaching 0 in 2014.
According to
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rasperry
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raspberry
jam
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, the purchases of the
jam
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was
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were
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 high at first and began to grow
reaching
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to reach
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 5 in 2012 and
remained
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remaining
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 constant from 2012 to 2014. The
procure
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procuring
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 of the grape
jam
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 was very low as it was around 0.5. Interestingly, it kept climbing and landed at 4.5 in 2014. The form of the cherry
jam
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 was different. The start was at approximately 2 and increased slightly until reaching 2.5. After that, it declined
signifacntly
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significantly
 reaching 2 in 2011.
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, it rose in 2012 landing on 3 and stayed stable but plummeted again in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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