The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
the charts illustrate the purchases of five different kinds of jams from 2009 to 2014. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that strawberry
jam
was at the top of the comparison over the years. First of all, in 2009, strawberry
jam
started at slightly higher than 3 and continued to increase during the years until reaching 7 by the end of 2014.
On the other hand
,
plum
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jam
had the opposite form of
the
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strawberry. By far, the beginning was at 2.5 in 2009 but
eventually
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it dropped gradually till reaching 0 in 2014.
According to
rasperry
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raspberry
jam
, the purchases of the
jam
was
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high at first and began to grow
reaching
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5 in 2012 and
remained
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constant from 2012 to 2014. The
procure
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of the grape
jam
was very low as it was around 0.5. Interestingly, it kept climbing and landed at 4.5 in 2014. The form of the cherry
jam
was different. The start was at approximately 2 and increased slightly until reaching 2.5. After that, it declined
signifacntly
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significantly
reaching 2 in 2011.
Then
, it rose in 2012 landing on 3 and stayed stable but plummeted again in 2014.
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