The diagram illustrate how steel rods aee manufactured in the furniture industry.
The given diagram describes the process of
steel
rod production by the manufacturers of furniture.
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rod making is a liner process comprised of ten steps i.e., melting, refinement, ingot making, strand casting, rolling, heat treatment, surface check, and cutting before ID stamping and inspection.
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with, raw materials i.e., yellow ore, iron ore, and carbon are gathered and transferred to the melting slits where these are subjected to the temperature of 1300- 1500 Celsius for melting. Linking Words
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melted raw materials are refined in a smelting cabin and Linking Words
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candescent metal is poured by a pouring machine into bar moulds for making Linking Words
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ingots. Following ingot making, wires of cooled
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produced through the step of strand casting in which each ingot is passed through the nozzle connected to a cooling reservoir of temperature 60 – 100 Celsius.
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subjected to the rollers to flatten the strands before subjecting them to the heating machines for heat treatment. Linking Words
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wires are passed on for surface check with the help of a measuring automation machine before sending them for cutting into equal sizes.
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rods produced are stamped with the manufacturer’s ID and Use synonyms
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passed for quality inspection.Linking Words
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