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Some people today feel that physical money will no longer be used in the future. Others feel it will still have some uses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by a number of the public that regular
money
 would lose popularity ,
while
 others say
the
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 physical
money
 would always maintain its importance.
Firstly
, the
research
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have
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 shown more and more
people
 have the tendency to use digital cains nowadays and there are many apps which can cause easy access
as well as
convenient
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the convenient
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 exchange of these coins for their users.
Moreover
,
due to
 the safety of
this
 kind of
money
 in comparison with physical
money
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 it is beneficial for
people
 to undergo
this
 change.
On the other hand
, the knowledge of
people
 of
this
 new version of
money
 is not complete and there are still a number of worries about trusting
on
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the new method. Plus, there is no chosen
money
 to occupy the physical
money
 ,and
people
 are using
the
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different types of them which can result in the
decrease
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 level of importance of digital
money
. In my opinion,
transfering
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transferring
 from physical
money
 to other types of
money
 is not as easy as
people
 think.
However
, the advantages of
this
 new version would cause the vanishing of real
money
.
Also
,
due to
 the improvement of the online world and technology,
the
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digital
money
 can be more related to the future. In conclusion,
this
 change needs a great amount of time
as well as
 an increase
of
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 social awareness in relation to digital
money
. It means,
the
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that
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 real
money
 would be so rare in use
while
all
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the banking system s and important transactions would work with new types of coins.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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