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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think has changed the way we worked? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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In today's technological era, many industries are using machines for the
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 that was done earlier by humans. In
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, the problems that occur
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 overdependency on telecommunication. On one hand, changes that occur with the use of computers are as depicted.
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, nowadays
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 can be done efficiently and effectively with little usage of time which ultimately reduces the stress and anxiety that occurs among employees
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 their pending
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, it was reported in Dental Clinic, that in the Accounting Department monthly production reports for Dentists can be made within 2 hours
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 of previous times when it took almost 3-4 days.
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,
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 can be done perfectly with little mistakes.
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 means most of the
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 is done automatically by the system.
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, the cons of using the Internet are as follows. A decrease in physical activity may lead to sedentary live styles leading to medical problems
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 as Obesity, Weak Eyesight.
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, an article was published in the Tribune Newspaper, and it was reported that 70% of individuals are wearing eye spectacles nowadays as compared to the past.
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, overuse of technology is not widening the area of knowledge, as employees don't have any queries about the
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 as everything is done by machines. To recapitulate, despite of many uses technology provides but still it should be used within limits. As
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, it may lead to health problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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