Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people’s life. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Nowadays, many
goverments
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governments
in the world spend large amounts of money on
art
which helps to develop quality in
people
's
life
,
specially
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in big cosmopolitan cities. In my
opinion
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I strongly agree that , because
art
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not
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just only helps to develop quality in
people
's
life
, more reasons to come.
Firstly
, if a
goverment
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government
can
affort
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afford
the
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large amounts is great, because it
mean
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this
is a developed country which not just only effort
themselve
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themselves
also
trough
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from
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art
or
art
exhibitions , it
was promote
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the country and culture ,
moreover
,to
enroll
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more tourists and boost up the business of tourism.
Secondly
,
art
is a great topic to educate children, which is
enaging
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engaging
managing
a
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wonderful family
activtities
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activities
to
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children and families to join ,
as well as
it
gain
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children's local culture, knowledge, and sense of belonging.
Thirdly
,
art
totally
develop
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quality in
people
's
life
, imagine that if our
communtity
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community
bring up more
art
to let
people
enjoy , I can tell
this
is a great way to reduce
people
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stress and cause
life
balance.
However
, some
people
think that governments should spend money on other things rather than
art
I think is reasonable ,
beacause
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because
every
countries
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situation cause
differenly
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differently
different
, some countries might
want
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towant
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invest the money more focus on
educational
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education
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or health. In conclusion , I personally really
appeaciate
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appreciate
art
and
artist's
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stories, so
in my opinion
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invest
art
,
for example
, bring up
art
to
art
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museum ,
art
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experience on the street or
art
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festival can
benfitcial
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beneficial
in many ways of counties.
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