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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or smalls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, it is more common for
people
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 to
purchase
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 items, from groceries to make-up
products
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, in large shopping malls than in small-scale shops. In
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 situation, many of it is have a hard
time
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 either bankrupt or even closing. From my perspective, I think it is beneficial to progress for
consumers
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.
To begin
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 with, it is more convenient for
people
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 to buy things in a big shopping mall. For
consumers
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, it can save a lot of
time
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 because large-scale malls are normally placed many kinds of
products
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 and brands for
people
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 to select in one area. Take me as an example. I would rather spend my
time
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 studying or working than shopping. Convenience is the thing I value the most. if I can
purchase
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 supplies for my daily life at one-stop shops, large shopping centres are the best choice for me.
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,
consumers
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 can
purchase
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 low-price
products
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 in large chain stores since a large company can
purchase
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 a lot of cargo to sell at the same
time
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.
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people
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 may buy more items than expected with every coin.
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, small neighbourhood stores sell higher prices of goods.
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 the reason why small retailers are becoming fewer because they do not have a competitive price.
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, Carrefour, a chain store in Taiwan, provide
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 that are not only high-quality but
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 inexpensive.
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, from the reasons mentioned above, I believed that even small retailers are faced with an uncompetitive situation. But it is still positive progress for
consumers
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 buying things in big retailers.
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