SOME BELIEVE THAT UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE SHOULD BE A COMPULSORY PART OF HIGH SCHOOL PROGRAMMER (FOR EXAMPLE WORKING FOR A CHARITY, IMPROVING THE NEIGHBORHOOD AND TEACHING SPORTS TO YOUNGER CHILDREN). TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

The question of whether
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service
should be a component of
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in secondary education is a topic of controversy in the realm of academia. Some contend that taking part in
community
service
can instil kindness and politeness in children, others advocate that
schools
should focus only on academic subjects.
However
, I acknowledge that there are some merits in both perspectives, but I am inclined to agree that high school must encourage volunteering in
community
service
alongside its curriculum.
Community
service
is a great way to teach the young generation, societal values like kindness, helping those in need and being polite to one another.
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,
schools
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with NGOs or charities without any financial benefits for the
students
as a part of their curriculum.
This
will not only teach them how to become a good human but
also
help them stay one in the real world once they are out of high school. On the flip side, it is argued that the main objective of secondary education is to ensure that
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students
end up in universities. The university is often seen as a place which prepares
students
for the global world as it offers them better job placements
along with
higher salaries.
As a result
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primary aim should be on academic subjects and not
community
service
as forces them to divide their valuable
time
.
For instance
, a student who spends half of their
time
volunteering for a charity
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would have much less
time
to study and even rest well.
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school and will have a lower chance of getting into an Ivy League college. In conclusion,
while
being a member of society, one must learn to give back and
community
service
offered by high
schools
is a great way to teach that but making it mandatory for everyone may not be in the best interest of every student. Different
students
have different goals, and they should decide how to spend their valuable
time
, it could be preparing for the desired college or taking part in
community
service
. In my opinion, it should be dependant on each student if they want to volunteer or not, as
time
is very precious and they would much rather like spend on preparing for college or exams.
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