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Some school work or travel for a period of time instead of going directly to the university.what are the advantages and disadvantages?

#school #work #travel #period #time #university
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Many students who finish
school
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 are uncertain about what to do next. It has been a new trend for many young people to take a short break to explore the world or to commence full-time work.
This
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 short paper will discuss the disadvantages and advantages of taking a break prior to commencing
university
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 and after finishing
school
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. First of all, there are many advantages that an individual can take in a period of time off before going to
university
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. Travelling can expand people's horizons and develop their identity even
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 have a better understanding of what they want in life and perhaps make a better decision when choosing an education and
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 of a career path.
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, if an individual chooses to work sometime between
school
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 and
university
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, it can ensure a stable financial position to be able to focus on studies
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 of everyday financial worries. Same as travelling, a person can learn different interactions with people from other places and develop emotional skills.
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, there are a few disadvantages that can come from taking a "gap year" between
school
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 and
university
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. There can be a big financial burden
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 of the travelling journey
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 a free lifestyle that can be destructive as there is no discipline to follow.
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, it would be hard to come back from the hard reality of time management and a harsh study regime. In conclusion, there are lots of advantages and disadvantages to taking time off between finishing
school
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 and commencing
university
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. Someone can learn from experience first-hand when travelling and working informally.
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, debt and lack of routine can be detrimental to the person who is going to
University
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. In the end,
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 is an individual choice based on life circumstances, age and ambitions.
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