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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 numerous individuals have chosen the path of self-employment rather than working for corporates or organisations mainly because being self-employed comes with unparalleled freedom. When a person is self-employed they have control over a
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 working for a company. Not only can they set their own schedule but
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 earnings for a particular job.
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, when a person is working for a company that makes presentations for others they get paid a fixed amount
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 when the same individual is self-employed they can set the price
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 the time frame that works for them for a presentation.
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 of freedom associated with it, self-employment does have some disadvantages.
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, the earnings are not fixed, one may have ample
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income for a few months and no orders for
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, being successful requires a
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 of perseverance and there might be a
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 of ups and downs when you are self-employed.
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 on their mental health and are under a
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 of stress in order to get work. In conclusion, many people have chosen to be self-employed rather than work for corporates as it comes with a
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 of freedom but there are a few mental health issues associated with that pathway.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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