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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives. So, then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that more students nowadays are taught by the use of technological advances than it was in the past.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 trend. On the one hand, there are a number of disadvantages
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 using technological devices in lecturing. First of all, parents must pay a prohibitive tuition fee for state-of-the-art equipment.
However
, there is still a wide range of ordinary families that are
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 in paying the teaching fee.
Secondly
, teachers are gradually getting too dependent on software
such
 as Powerpoint or video platforms. More specifically, if there is a day that has a blackout or some technical problems, the lecturer may get anxious and confused giving a total lesson.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why the use of technological advances is absolutely beneficial. The principal one is that students would learn more from many sources on the Internet to widen their
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 after school. In fact, the more they learn by themselves, the more they memorize it better than someone teaching it in class.
Additionally
, using an advanced piece of equipment like a television or a robot at school may captivate children a lot.
For example
, the teachers may use historical dynamic videos to indicate the context
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 the past in history class which is usually known as a mundane subject. In conclusion,
while
 technology has some negative aspects in teaching students, taking advantage of these modern-day devices would definitely bring a huge amount of benefits for lecturing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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