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There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

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Being a productive
person
 in a working
place
 and having the motivation to achieve the best results in
work
 is truly important.
However
, the rising question is what makes a working
person
 have sufficient motivation to continue working in the same
place
 ? I strongly disagree with the opinion that salary is the key to staying at a certain company or
place
. There are many reasons which are equally significant and
this
 essay will discuss some of them.
Firstly
,
one
 can not deny the significance of money,
however
, factors,
such
 as the working environment in the company definitely influential to keep a
person
 working effectively.
For instance
, to
work
 in a positive atmosphere where hard
work
 is rewarded with compliments or gratitude and treated with respect by the boss and co-workers is highly essential.
On the contrary
, even if the salary is fairly high a
place
 where jealousy or constant orders that oppose the working conditions which cause stress and discomfort would lead a worker to hate the working
place
 and be unmotivated to keep working.
Furthermore
, many working people are motivated by the fact that they love what they do. As a matter of fact, enjoying
one
's
work
 is the key which drives a
person
 to
work
 with passion and efficiency.
Thus
, it results in achieving the best outcomes. Evidently, researchers have conducted a study comparing the productivity of two people,
one
 who does not like his occupation,
while
 the other party enjoy what he does. The results showed that the latter's productivity and accomplishment surpassed the former significantly. 
This
 suggests the importance of liking and enjoying
work
.
Overall
, working with motivation is a major factor in an efficient working style. People's aims of staying and working vary from
one
person
 to another. Personally,
i
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 find the most core components that influence and motivate workers are the company's working environment and enjoying the
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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