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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects at university in many countries. Why this is the case? What affects does this have on societies?

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The issue of academic education has grown in importance over the past few decades.
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 is because there is a link between the university‘s majors, professions, and financial status. Unfortunately, in some developing
countries
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, not enough
students
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study
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science
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.
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.
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 with, there are two reasons why
students
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 have less tendency to
study
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science
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 in poor
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countries’
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 universities.
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, the recent economic crisis has affected all parts of these
countries
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, including universities. As
science
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 laboratories need costly equipment, university officials may charge
science
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students
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 more to compensate for their low budget.
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, many
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 find these courses unaffordable.
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, the modern demanding life ,especially in poor
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, encourages
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 to choose majors with high salaries in the future.
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, they tend to choose majors that end up with well-paid
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 after graduation,
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 as business.
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, only well-funded
students
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 with no concern about their future salaries may choose to
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science
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. Not enough
students
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 in
science
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 can have two negative effects on
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countries
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. One negative could be an increase in the unemployment rate. In fact,
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 many
students
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 would apply for well-paid
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, these
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 have limited capacity ,and many are left unemployed.
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, a country’s progress may be hindered because many industries rely on
science
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,
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 as computer
science
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 and chemistry. The fewer professionals there are in these fields, the less likely it is for undeveloped
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 to progress.
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, the whole of society may suffer. In conclusion, nowadays, very few
students
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 tend to
study
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science
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 as their academic major in poor
societies
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. Increased tuition fees for these subjects without any promising future
jobs
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 may contribute to
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 problem. The increased unemployment rate and the lower likelihood of progress in the country are two negatives, which can exacerbate the situation in undeveloped
societies
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.
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