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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In recent years, there are certain countries where online
payment
 transactions using mobile
phone
applications
 dramatically increased. Some
people
 say that it is
benificiar
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beneficial
beneficiary
.
However
, some individuals
are argue
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 it. In
this
 essay, will discuss both the
way
 for advantages and
disdvantages
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disadvantages
. Nowadays,
smart
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smartphone
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phone
 use is drastically increased
where
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and
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lot
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a lot
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 of
applications
 are available with it.
For instance
, games, social media
applications
 and
for
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apply
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online transactions. To purchase goods and services
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the
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general public
is
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apply
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using online
payment
applications
. As
an
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 major advantage mobile
phone
applications
 are easy to use. Not only
transfering
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transferring
 money from
one
 account to other but
also
 just in a few minutes. it is the easiest and quickest
way
 of
payment
.
This
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mordern
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modern
payment
 methods are safe as it is authenticated with OTP (
one time
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 password) and
biomatric
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biometric
 scanners. It helps
people
 to execute
tansactions
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transactions
 and pay from anywhere in the world with
one
 click.
Moreover
, It reduces the burden of carrying cash and debit or credit card.
For example
, if
people
 are travelling from
one
 place to another, they can easily roam wherever they want without worrying
for
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about
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 cash and fear of
lossing
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losing
 their cash and debit or credit cards. It reduces dependency. Only
smartphone
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a smartphone
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 or computer and internet connectivity
is require
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is required
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. it is the fastest
way
 of
payment
. On
a
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the
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 Contrary side, Mobile
phone
applications
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application
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 usage for
payment
 is difficult for those who are not
familier
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familiar
 with technology.
neverthless
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Nevertheless
, it is the fastest
way
 but internet connectivity is mandatory. It
also
 leads to cybercrime and an
invidividual
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individual
 may
loose
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 their bank balance and some other consequences may occur if
account
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an account
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get
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hack
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hacked
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 by
hacker
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a hacker
the hacker
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. In
cocluding
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concluding
 line, definitely there are
few
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a few
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drowbacks
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drawbacks
of
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to
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 using
money
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a money
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 transfer application.
However
, it can be controlled by
it's
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its
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 proper usage and by maintaining authentication credentials.
Due to
 limited
drowbacks
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drawbacks
people
 can not ignore its multiple advantages.
Hence
, it shows that
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
online
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the online
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payment
 method outweigh
it's
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its
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 disadvantages.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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