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Some people think the main benefit of international cooperations is in protection of the environment , while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary era, because of
globalization
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, every
sector
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 benefits like education, technology, employment, medicine and
business
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.
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, Many
people
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 believe that international collaboration has improved the
environment
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,
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 other groups of
people
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 think that it enhances global
business
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. Before arriving at my opinion, both sides of the argument will be discussed
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. Considering the former view, some individuals believe that cooperation with other nations is helping to solve the global warming problem
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 because every country is facing
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 issue and finding a way to improve the
environment
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.
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, many scientists and experts find various methods and present them in global associations. Government
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 for
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 research and provide funds for that.
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, in present days, WTO provides much
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 to reduce pollution
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 that every government received help from
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 organization.
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, it is facing that because of
globalization
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, authorities of the state share new techniques with each other. Which is give advantages to poor states. Examining the latter opinion, some
people
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 may counter-argue that today's
business
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 has been enhanced, because of international cooperation. It is fact that today government
sector
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 gets the maximum income from the
business
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sector
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 as tax and it increases the DGP growth of countries. The most imperative is that cooperations give new mode to the
business
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 part
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 as new technology, row-material, strategy and method and
also
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 investment
support
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.
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 is the main reason to grow
business
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 nowadays.
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, Imports and Export are possible because of
globalization
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 and it improves the relationship between the nation. every
business
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 is possible with the help of other
countries'
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support
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.
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, all nations provide row-materials and ready products to each other and eventually they get what they need for their company.
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, in my opinion, I firmly
support
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 the second view. The main justification is that compared to the
environment
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 the
business
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sector
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 received more and more benefits from international
support
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,
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result
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 many
people
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 get good opportunities to develop their idea for a
business
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 and get employment in
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advanced companies.
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, there are many supporters of the first view to benefit of
environment
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 because of international cooperation, but my arguments prove that the
business
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sector
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 gets more benefits in
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globalization
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.
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