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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar and table chart illustrates, the overseas
students
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, studying in four foreign countries as
USA
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,
UK
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, Cannada, and
Australia
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 in the period 2004 and 2012.
Overall
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, the table chart depicts,
UK
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 and
Australia
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 had
a similar numbers
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a similar number
similar numbers
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 of
students
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 in 2004 and 2012.
While
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,
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apply
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 Table chart
showing
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shows
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Australia
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having
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has
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 a high
percentage
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 of foreign
students
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 compared to
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UK
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the UK
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 in given
years
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.
However
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, Canada has
least
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number
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 among the four countries. Most of the
students
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 choose to study in the
USA
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. But the
percentage
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 of overseas
students
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 is low. To start with, Australian and
UK
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 foreign
students
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 are equal in
number
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, near to 200 in
both
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 countries in the year 2012 and approximately 150 in 2004. But as per
percentage
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Australia
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 has 19% in 2004 and 24% in 2012.
Consequently
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, in the
UK
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 only 9 and 13% in
both
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years
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.
Furthermore
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, Canada has only a few
pulpis
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pulpits
pulpit
pulp is
 in two
years
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. 48% in 2004 and 52% in 2012 and
percentage
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-wise it is showing 5% and 7%.
Last
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 but not the least
USA
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 showed a huge
number
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 of
students
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 in
both
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years
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,
that is
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near
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nearly
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200 in 2004 and 249 in 2012. But in the case of
percentage
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USA
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the USA
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 has least in
number
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.
both
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 the
years
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 show 2%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, usa, uk, australia, percentage, years, number, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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