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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar and table chart illustrates, the overseas
students
, studying in four foreign countries as
USA
,
UK
, Cannada, and
Australia
 in the period 2004 and 2012.
Overall
, the table chart depicts,
UK
 and
Australia
 had
a similar numbers
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a similar number
similar numbers
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 of
students
 in 2004 and 2012.
While
,
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apply
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 Table chart
showing
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shows
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Australia
having
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has
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 a high
percentage
 of foreign
students
 compared to
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 in given
years
.
However
, Canada has
least
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the least
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number
 among the four countries. Most of the
students
 choose to study in the
USA
. But the
percentage
 of overseas
students
 is low. To start with, Australian and
UK
 foreign
students
 are equal in
number
, near to 200 in
both
 countries in the year 2012 and approximately 150 in 2004. But as per
percentage
Australia
 has 19% in 2004 and 24% in 2012.
Consequently
, in the
UK
 only 9 and 13% in
both
years
.
Furthermore
, Canada has only a few
pulpis
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pulpits
pulpit
pulp is
 in two
years
. 48% in 2004 and 52% in 2012 and
percentage
-wise it is showing 5% and 7%.
Last
 but not the least
USA
 showed a huge
number
 of
students
 in
both
years
,
that is
near
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nearly
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200 in 2004 and 249 in 2012. But in the case of
percentage
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 has least in
number
.
both
 the
years
 show 2%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, usa, uk, australia, percentage, years, number, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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