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With the technological development, some people think technology reduce crime, but some people think it encourage crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion

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, some
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 think it encourages
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 I disagree that
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 reduces
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. on the one hand ,technological
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 can bring some advantages,
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, it will help some companies to promote their technological innovation and advancement.
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, some high-risk work can be replaced by robots which protect staff safety.
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,
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 makes
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's life more convenient .
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,even though
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 can bring some advantages, it will lead
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 more rely on machines ,
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 , if a company's power fails ,the machines could not produce and it will bring economic losses to the company.
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 will lead many
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 to lose their jobs, and these
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 do not have income,and they need to survive,so they have to commit crimes which will increase
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 rates,
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 ,it
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 leads unbalance society
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 ,and
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 will not sense of happiness.contrasty,I think the government have the responsibility to promote disadvantages of
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 to prevent
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 government should provide
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 with relative skills training.
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 , with the technological
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 which will develop some emerging industries ,
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 reason ,some companies should increase more jobs for
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,and help them prepare for employment ,so that
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 can have income
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 they do not need to commit a
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 reduce
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 rates. in conclusion , I disagree that
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 reduces
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,I think the government should address the root causes of
crime
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