Write a letter to you friend describing he/she should get a job rather than getting in a college. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college Explain why getting a Job is a good idea for him Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him

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Dear Stephen, I have received your letter a few days ago. I am writing back to you on the dilemma you shared in the previous letter on whether to join a college to

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higher studies or

getting

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a job.

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pursuing higher studies can look fancy but from a realistic point of view you should look for

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apply

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employment in my view.

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, as per my

understanding

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there is no college in your locality which offers

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the pristine

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quality education which you are looking for. For pursuing admission to

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a college, you need to travel to the capital which is far away from your current residence.

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, living far away from home would not be enjoyable and would cause you additional burdens.

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, the surplus income would be really useful for your family since you have two younger siblings as well who are dependent on your parents if you can manage employment easier for you to get recruited in the industries. The location of your house makes it highly convenient as you reside adjacent to an industrial area.

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, I hope

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suggestion of a job search than that of higher studies helps you to make the appropriate choice. Lots of love and best wishes in your future endeavours. yours sincerely Sami

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

218 words

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Write a letter to you friend describing he/she should get a job rather than getting in a college. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college Explain why getting a Job is a good idea for him Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him

some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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