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Some people think that advertising on TV is usefull for viewers, while other disagree. Discuss both sides and give opinion.

#people #tv #usefull #viewers
The discussion about the advertising issue is becoming overwhelmingly popular among the public.
Although
 it is sometimes thought that adverting is useful for subscribers, other
people
 believe that advertising is useless for viewers. In my opinion, deciding whether focusing on advertising is beneficial for
people
 should depend on the variety of advertising information. On the one hand, it is no doubt that some advertising is useful for viewers, especially when they desire to buy some items that they required. TV programs
alaways
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always
 provide some information about the products, if customers need, they could purchase from the TV programs, which is very convenient for users.
Also
, it is known that some educational advertising is
also
 shown to the audience
in
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the during
of
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programs. It is
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a benefit
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benefit
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 for young
people
 that they are
in
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 the age of learning, more educational advertising means they could get knowledge from the amusement, which is a good way to teach them.
On the other hand
, some advertising is not useful for
people
,
sometime
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 even
cause
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 drawback effects. For
instence
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instance
, there
are
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 more and more loan advertising in
the
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TV program, which
lead
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leads
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people
 to loan from some informal companies. It would mislead
people
 to get some information which is not true, or sometimes, push
people
 to crime
for
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 pay the
high interest
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 loan. In conclusion, with the reasons explained above, I believe that it is worth
to present
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the
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advertising which is positive for the users,
otherwise
, it could bring some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 to the audience.
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