It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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of discriminating

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between right and wrong is crucial for

human

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. When it comes to

children

,

punishment

become necessary to teach them how to differentiate between these two. I almost agree with

this

statement. In the paragraphs to come

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essay will explain the reasons and the possible sort of punishments which parents and teachers

allowed

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to use for young

children

. There are two reasons why

punishment

is necessary for

children

. At

first,

it could nourish

children

more

responsible

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.

This

is because they become aware

from

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the possible consequences of their actions.

In other

words

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should they punish

whenever

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they treat in a bad way, they may understand there will be responses for their activities.

In addition

, punishments could help

children

develop their social skills like decision-making.

This

is because

punishment

it’s the only way that

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the

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both

side

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of a decision.

For instance

, a child who

decide

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to participate in harming another child because of peer pressure may don’t know that it’s a bad

action

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. And if guardians do not punish him, the ability of

decision making

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in

critical

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position

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may not develop enough.

Thus

,

punishment

is not only make

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does not only make

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children

more responsible

,

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but

also

contribute

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contributes

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to

a better social abilities

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better social abilities

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and it seems to be quite necessary for

children

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in

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early

ages

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.

On the other hand

, there is one reason that

make

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punishment

unnecessary.

Punishment

could

effect

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psychological

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aspects of a personality in a bad manner and make

children

stubborn.

This

is because some sorts of

punishment

are not as obvious as they should be.

Thus

,

children

cannot understand the logic behind that particular

punishment

.

As a

result

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they change their attitude to repeat that action to understand why they are punished and become stubborn.

Hence

, it seems that

punishment

is not necessary for

children

to learn how to decide between right and wrong. There is one sort of

punishment

that seems to be beneficial for parents and

teacher

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teachers

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to teach

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good

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manner

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manners

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to

children

:

deprived

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children

from

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of

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their belongings. I mean,

instead

of giving them

a

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negative feedback, just do not give them

a

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apply

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positive one or deprived them

from

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of

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.

This

is because it does not create a negative environment that

children

scare

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from

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their parents and teachers and could help them to perceive the difference between right and wrong. In conclusion,

although

punishment

can have

negative

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a negative

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impact on

children

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children's

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personality

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personalities

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, I’m of the opinion that it’s necessary to teach them how

behave

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to behave

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correctly by improving their responsibility and

decision making

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decision-making

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.

Also

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,Also

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there is always a way manner for

punishment

to be sure that could be both beneficial and safe.