It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
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children
, punishment
become necessary to teach them how to differentiate between these two. I almost agree with this
statement. In the paragraphs to come this
essay will explain the reasons and the possible sort of punishments which parents and teachers allowed
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children
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There are two reasons why punishment
is necessary for children
. At first,
it could nourish children
more responsible
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responsibly
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In addition
, punishments could help children
develop their social skills like decision-making. This
is because punishment
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On the other hand
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makes
punishment
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affect
psychological
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children
stubborn. This
is because some sorts of punishment
are not as obvious as they should be. Thus
, children
cannot understand the logic behind that particular punishment
. As a
result
they change their attitude to repeat that action to understand why they are punished and become stubborn. Add a comma
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Hence
, it seems that punishment
is not necessary for children
to learn how to decide between right and wrong.
There is one sort of punishment
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children
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children
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their parents and teachers and could help them to perceive the difference between right and wrong.
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children
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decision making
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punishment
to be sure that could be both beneficial and safe.Submitted by miladahmadi9619 on
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