THe pie charts show the spending of a school in the UK from 1981 to 2001

THe pie charts show the spending of a school in the UK from 1981 to 2001
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The given pie charts depict school spending in 5 categories in the UK from 1981 to 2001.
Overall
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while
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expenditures on teachers'
salaries
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and insurance increased, spending on resources and
salaries
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for other workers declined over the span. Back to details, in the year
1981
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the school spent 40% on teachers'
salaries
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and in the following decade
this
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proportion already was half of all spending, but
at the end
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of the loop it fell to 45%. Accounting for just 2% of insurance expenditure was the lowest.
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, in 2001 it went up
on
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6%
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but representing just below one-tenth it
also
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remained the lowest.
In addition
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spending on furniture and equipment inclined
on
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8% from 15% to 23%.
By contrast
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,
school
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the school
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spent approximately one-third on
salaries
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for other workers but it went down
on
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6% in 1991 and again in 2001 accounting for only 15% which was almost two times smaller compared to 1981. The remained category of spending was on resources,
such
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as books, and was the same 15%as furniture and equipment in 1981. Rising in 1991
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5%
then
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it decreased to just below 10% in 2001.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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