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Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.Do you agree or disagree

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In
this
 contemporary world, it is true that the public is homeless and there are no jobs for them. One school of thought opines that governments of a particular homey should be responsible for the problem of the public not having houses and being unemployed. I firmly agree with the laid statement and reasons for inclination are articulated in
further
 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are myriads of reasons supporting my ideology, first and foremost is that the development of a bucolic is in the hands of the government and if the developments are not happening in the nation
then
 there will be no jobs and the public will not be able to buy a house which is a basic necessity in today's world.
For example
, if a government of a particular nation gets investment from foreign countries or within the country it can help the nation to develop and it can create tons of jobs which will solve the problem of unemployment. On the other side, there are fewer folk advocating the opposite viewpoint.
Firstly
, many companies within the country are laying off their employees
due to
 the rise in inflation and controlling the balance sheet of the company. public who are homeless tends to indulge in criminal activities like robbery and kidnapping to earn money. As it can
also
 lead to an increase in crime rates in the province. Agglomerating all the points, I hereby again favour my perceptive that government should develop the state to control the rise in unemployment and the public going homeless.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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