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What is globalization and how much important or harmful for recent worldwide?

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Globalization
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 is the spread of business activity across international borders. There are several causes of why
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globalization
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 needs
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growing companies and
countries
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, For businesses, the advantages of
globalization
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 can include cost savings, international recruitment, specific market opportunities, and the spreading of risk.The second reason of
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 of
globalization
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that
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Countries
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 that have a positive trade relationship with each other, have an incentive not to get into conflict. On a global scale,
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reduce
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 the likelihood of armed conflict between
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, owing to investment
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between USA and Germany for their properties they had
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 hold on friendships
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 there was
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a war
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 happened 2
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in the past
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globalization
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 made their contacts inseparable.
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,
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 of technology throughout the globe is good because of good agreements of
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. Any country can borrow the technology through the agreement and can implement it in their country for their
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We can communicate
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 other easily from any part of the globe by using
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 technology at minimal cost, time and
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, there are some drawbacks that
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 makes
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 influence
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them
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 who are
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countries
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.The one disadvantage of
globalization
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 is that Individual
countries
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 become dependent on other nations which are producing or
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 with them for their supply chains. If there is a disruption to
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 chain, they may no longer be able to produce the
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 themselves
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can not able continuing to increase its
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contact
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 with Russia which is its partner
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 business.And addition
Globalization
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 can increase
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the unemployment
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 rate
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 means
Globalization
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 demands
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higher-skilled work
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 cheaper
price
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prices
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. But
countries
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where education systems are relatively weak
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 are not capable of producing highly skilled workers.
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, the unemployment rate is increasing in those
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Besides
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 makes
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 between some
countries
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that
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means
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 trade imbalance which refers to the imbalance of values between a country’s import and
export’s
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 goods and services.
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increase
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 in developed
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 by their competitors. In summary,
globalization
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 plays different roles in each developing
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countries
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country
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between
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such
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an advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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 or
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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