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Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports is better like tennis and swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #part #sports #teams #football #tennis
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society argue that engaging in
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sports
 ,
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, football
are
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 more welcoming than attending
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other individually played ones .
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 believe both of them are very beneficial, in
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 will discuss both sides and explain my support for the first view. On the one hand, there are numerous advantages
in
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 taking part in
team based
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sports
. Being part of
ateam
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a team
 would help players to improve their interpersonal skills.Joining
in
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clubs or teams provide them with more chance
of
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communication
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 with other teammates
a
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help them to
stike
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strike
 up
nwe
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new
 friendships.
In addition
, these
type
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 of
sports
are
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 less boring.
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an
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 sport that involves corporate and
help
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 of other teammates and during
this
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intractions
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interactions
interaction
chance
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 of
comunication
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communication
 or talking face to face
make
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 athletes
to
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share their opinions which can be really exciting for them.
On the other hand
, in
sprots
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sports
spots
 which are played ,all the achievements are for one person ,and
player
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players
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 do not share
there
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 medals. It is important since it is
psychlogically
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psychologically
 proved that
player
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players
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 in
these kind
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 of
sport
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are
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 more motivated. the source of motivation come is that one person
mostly
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 would be acclaimed.For
examp
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example
;e, in football all players,whether they had
role
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 in matches or regardless of
goals
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 they scored will be claimed
in
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 the same extent. In conclusion, players in
team based
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sports
 not only can enjoy more
,
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but
also
 can improve other
interpesonal
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interpersonal
 skills and find
nwe
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new
 friends.
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