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Many countries today are experiencing high levels of migration from rural areas to cities. What are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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Nowadays, many people move from rural
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 to urban regions. There are numerous reasons for urbanization and it
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 affects local residents. I will explain the causes of
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 situation and describe the effects of
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 issue as well. migration phenomenon is a new issue worldwide. many rural people tend to migrate to urban
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 because they think if they move to a big
city
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 they will more succeed in their life. more facilities, entertainment instruments, parks and
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 upmarket shops cause they move to urban regions. they believe that they achieve their goals and their dreams in big
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,
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 they can access a better life in future.
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 they can find better jobs in big
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. it's obvious that their chance to get a position in the
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 is more than in rural
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 so they come to the interurban hoping to find a better job with a high income.
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 statistics, finding a brilliant position is 70 per cent of migrants root. in ,contrast
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 transfer has some effect on
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 dwellers. the population of the
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 increase
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 traffic and congestion rise more and more. with the increase in ,vehicles we should expect an increase in air pollution which has awful effects on urban residents' health. ,
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 escalation in crime is terrible effects on people who live in
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. many immigrants do have not enough money to rent suitable houses so they will be residents in deprived
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 and cannot find an appropriate job so will tend to thief.
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 the Tehran police statement with increasing exodus, the per cent of crime increased in
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. in conclusion urban attractions and hoping to find a career are two factors of the shift from rural
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 to
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 regions, increasing crime plus air pollution are the disadvantages of
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 phenomenon too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural depopulation
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • livelihoods
  • overpopulation
  • cultural integration
  • affordability
  • public services
  • housing prices
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • cultural diversity
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • basic services
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