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Percentage change in number of households made homeless due to selected immediate causes 2008-2013 indexed

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The line graph provides an illustration of the percentage of displaced people using 4 different reasons over a period of approximately half a decade.
Overall
, the main feature of the data is that all the causes for homelessness were declining before the dramatic increase in the private tenancy ending reason showing the primary form over that period.
Initially
, it is clearly evident that in 2008 all 4 categories were starting with a percentage of 100 homeless people until 2009 when the private tenancy ending started to soar sharply amounting to more than 200% in 2013.
In addition
, Mortgage repossession was fluctuating during that period composing just below 50% in 2013. What is more, other homelessness forms remain almost the same providing negligible changes
such
 as relationship breakdown which had a slight increase amounting to over 90 per cent
at the end
.
Furthermore
, after decreasing in 2008 parental exclusion had a small fluctuation and dropped slightly to almost 70%.
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