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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday fort he first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your. In your letter •explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday •describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Deniz, I have learned that you are going on a camping holiday for the first time. As you know I am camping every summer and I think you would probably like camping. You will be directly connected with nature. You will wake up with bird sounds and
this
 is amazing. I am supposing that the camp area will be near to the sea. You will not believe the view which looks like a painting and I am sure that you will not want to come back.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of camping.
For example
, you will see different kinds of insects you have never seen. It is a bit frightening. Another disadvantage is that you must sleep on
a
Change the article
an
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 uncomfortable floor. If you
want
Add the particle
towant
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advise
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advice
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, you should take your pillow. Despite
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 disadvantages, camping is a passion for me. I know that you will like camping at least me. I want to join your holiday and see what happens. I will be
waiting
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forwaiting
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 your reply. See you.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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