The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical educator lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
The vast majority of people have been involving a serious strain on health issues which is called being overweight. Some people believe that the best way to tackle the issues
,
is to do exercise and sport in schools. I completely agree that Remove the comma
apply
this
solution can help effectively to solve gradually to reach the goal without any cost.
In our modern world, most people have suffered literally Linking Words
of
obesity which Change preposition
from
have
a variety of roots that can affect our lifestyle. Change the verb form
has
For example
, bad habits in a large portion of food during eating a mealLinking Words
and
, consuming snacks a lot Correct word choice
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instead
of eating an effective meal, and Linking Words
also
lack of exercise or inactivity can hurt seriously our Linking Words
body
. To have overweight is a significant problem that has negative effects on our life. Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
Unfortunately
we often look for quick solutions to overcome Add a comma
,Unfortunately
against
our concerns. Change preposition
apply
For example
, taking a cruel diet for losing weight or consuming chemical drugs that are harmful to our Linking Words
body
, and Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
to
have irreparable consequences.
We need to increase public awareness of these issues. I believe, the basis of the method is incorrect, as Fix the infinitive
apply
the
part of the question is mentioned, young children are taught physical education lessons in inappropriate ways at schools that must be changed urgently. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, in my country, doing sport has not been emphasized sufficiently, at least two hours per week Linking Words
which
is not enough to prevent sedentary lifestyles or not to be encouraged peers to continue their exercise Correct pronoun usage
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out
of school. Change preposition
outside
In contrast
, to add extra time Linking Words
in
the curriculum Change preposition
to
sport
activities in schools are needed.
In conclusion, changing lifestyles, and to be raised children with the correct method of diet, and physical education will ensure Change the noun form
sports
this
is the Linking Words
last
way to improve public health.Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite