The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical educator lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The vast majority of people have been involving a serious strain on health issues which is called being overweight. Some people believe that the best way to tackle the issues
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is to do exercise and sport in schools. I completely agree that
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solution can help effectively to solve gradually to reach the goal without any cost. In our modern world, most people have suffered literally
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obesity which
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a variety of roots that can affect our lifestyle.
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, bad habits in a large portion of food during eating a meal
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, consuming snacks a lot
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of eating an effective meal, and
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lack of exercise or inactivity can hurt seriously our
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. To have overweight is a significant problem that has negative effects on our life.
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we often look for quick solutions to overcome
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our concerns.
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, taking a cruel diet for losing weight or consuming chemical drugs that are harmful to our
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have irreparable consequences. We need to increase public awareness of these issues. I believe, the basis of the method is incorrect, as
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part of the question is mentioned, young children are taught physical education lessons in inappropriate ways at schools that must be changed urgently.
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, in my country, doing sport has not been emphasized sufficiently, at least two hours per week
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is not enough to prevent sedentary lifestyles or not to be encouraged peers to continue their exercise
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of school.
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, to add extra time
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the curriculum
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activities in schools are needed. In conclusion, changing lifestyles, and to be raised children with the correct method of diet, and physical education will ensure
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way to improve public health.
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