the diagram shows the process of making coffee

the diagram shows the process of making coffee
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The diagram illustrates the procedure of making
coffee
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the creation of
coffee
which we know is a long road where are plenty of processes.The first steps are made by people,
while
most of the other parts are made by machines or natural processes.
Firstly
,people,who work in the field have to collect the
coffee
beans.
However
,they still contain too much liquid which is soaked by the sun in the second step.The next process is preparing beans for making
coffee
by hitting them to a high temperature.
However
,in the following stage machine freezes them at a significant temperature.After ,that the future
coffee
source has to be ground.
Secondly
,the next step shows that cooled
coffee
powder is mixed with hot water.
However
,
this
mixture has to be filtered,so it happens in the next stage.Surprisingly,
this
mix must be cooled again.
Moreover
,after freezing it is ground again.For making the perfect shape and structure
coffee
mixture is dried in a vacuum.After getting rid of water powder can be sorted into jars
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